Leigh

Here is a sample story from a collection of shorts that I am working on. ย These are so much fun, I love just jumping straight into the fucking! This is from a male perspective and sometimes I have trouble with that so it was good practice.

Let me know what you think!

And yeah, I am a squirter so a lot of my characters are too ๐Ÿ˜‰

Leigh came in our cute little living room with nothing on but a shirt and her undies. She knows exactly what it does to me and she loves it. As soon as I saw her, the hem of her shirt barely covering her lovely firm ass, my dick got hard.

She walked over to me without a word and sat in my lap facing me. I love the way her warm body feels against mine, her lips brushing over my neck below my ear. She ground her hips into mine, feeling my cock rubbing against her hot pussy through her thin panties. She kissed me the way that I love, nibbling and licking while I moaned softly into her mouth.

“Leigh, you’re so fucking hot”, I whispered. She put her finger against my lip, shutting me up, and then took my hand and put it on her shirt over her breast. I leaned back, playing with her sexy tits, and didn’t try to say anything else. My fingers moved over her her nipples, squeezing and tugging gently. Leigh arched her back and moved her hips in a circle, pushing my dick against her clit.

She reached down and unbuttoned my jeans, then pulled them off. My hard cock poked out through my boxers. Leigh got to her knees in front of me and took my dick in her mouth softly. She licked the head, then kissed up and down my shaft while hot pre-cum leaked out and dripped down onto her lips. She licked it off, then smiled at me.

I felt her warm hands tugging at my boxers, pulling them down and hardly missing a beat as she licked up and down my shaft. She started to play with my balls, rolling them around and squeezing gently, as she took my cock into her mouth. I felt her tongue working its’ way around the head of my rock hard dick and leaned back, enjoying it. Nobody gives head like my baby, I love the way she handles my dick.

She was sucking harder now, moving her head up and down quickly while she teased my balls. I tugged at her shirt and she got the hint, she pulled it off quickly and went right back to my cock. I love the way her firm tits bounce while she sucks me off, and I could see her nipples were hard. I sighed and leaned back, enjoying myself. I felt her hand on the shaft of my dick and then her warm mouth on my balls. I love the way she sucks them and she knows it. Her hand moved up and down faster, squeezing lightly. I moaned once and Leigh sucked harder, moving her tongue back and forth over my balls and loving it.

It was her hand rubbing her pussy as she sucked on me that got me close, but she noticed in time and stood up. Her soaking wet panties came down and she lowered herself slowly on my cock. I could feel every inch of her tight pussy while I slid into her and it felt amazing. I took one of her hard nipples in my mouth as she started moving up and down on my dick. I moaned her name and Leigh started moving faster, her pretty tits bouncing close to my face. I bit down a little on her nipple as she ground her pussy into me, pushing my dick in deep while she rocked back and forth.

I felt her pussy juices running down my thighs and pushed even deeper into her as she started to cum the first time. She put her hands around my neck and nibbled my lips while she rode me. I helped out as best I could, thrusting up deep inside of her tight, wet hole. She started bouncing faster, my cock coming almost all the way out of her before sliding back in all the way. I could feel the strong muscles inside of her squeezing down on my shaft while she rode me hard.

All at once she lifted up, my cock popping out, and squirted all over my lap. Her hot cum ran all over me and the couch and I loved it. A second later I was back inside and she was fucking me hard again. I lost track of how many times she came, soaking me with her sexy pussy juice the entire time, but after a few minutes I started to get close. I pulled at her shoulders and Leigh knew what I wanted. She turned got off and put her feet on the floor facing the couch. I stood up behind her and slid my slippery, wet cock into her tight asshole. She gasped at first, then relaxed and backed into me. I felt her tight asshole squeezing hard up and down the length of my dick. I fucked her ass slowly for a few minutes while she rubbed her clit. I think I felt her cum again, her asshole gripping my dick, and then I came too.

Hot sticky cum shot deep into her asshole, filling it up and drizzling out around the sides of my dick. I pulled out slowly and knelt behind her. Her pussy was so wet that my fingers went in easily, sliding fast in and out of her wet hole. I bent my head down and started licking her asshole while I fingered her. The cum dripped out and covered my cheeks and chin but I stuck my tongue in even further and moved my hand faster. I could tell she was going to cum hard, her back arched and she started pushing her ass into my face. I buried my tongue inside of her ass and fingered her as fast and deep as I could. When she came her pussy juice squirted out everywhere, running down her thighs and covering my face.

After she stopped shaking I held her and we kissed, she tasted our cum that was mixed together on my lips and smiled at me.

12 Comments

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12 responses to “Leigh

  1. *boring*

    You start off writing like a 15 year old who’s just discovered sex. And then get worse from there on out.
    Your style is poor and dull. 3/10 must try harder.

  2. Oh my, sweetheart I do feel the above comment is so harsh! I would be more supportive as to suggest that firstly it’s important to be a good writer, then write good erotica; Keep up your enthusiasm and practice! Congrats….Ali x

  3. Thank you both for reading, and leaving a comment!

    I haven’t ever written erotica before, and I am a bit nervous. To get over my nerves I decided to post the filthiest, most hardcore thing I’ve written and wait to see if people would read it.

    My first book will be much more traditional and toned-down. But this worked! I shared something really private and got a bad review. I’m bulletproof now, hehe ๐Ÿ™‚

  4. Steve

    I’ll suggest how this encounter might read from a man’s perspective….

    Wow, she’s looking FIT tonight, I’ve got to get some of that. Yeah that’s it, over here. Oh fuck, that feels good. She’s so hot. Mmm, shit. Yeah that’s it girl, yeah you know what to do. Oh fuck. Suck it like that. Damn that feels good. Man, I’m getting ready to FUCK. Yeah that’s it, stick in like that. Oh shit yeah, that feels so good. Fuck me I love this girl’s pussy. Damn. She looks like she’s enjoying this too, so I must be doing something right. Yeah come on girl, let’s do this. Oh shit. Yes. Goddman it. Damn, I’m getting about ready to bust. Yeah keep doing that girl, don’t stop. Oh…FUCK…God DAMN it. Shit. Oh yeah. Oh fuck, that felt good. I LOVE this girl…

    etc etc

    Your piece reads like you think a man thinks like a woman and thinks all kinds of elaborate thoughts during sex. Hope this helps you to get a bit more into the cruder male mindset ๐Ÿ™‚

  5. THANK YOU! That was excellent feedback and I really appreciate it.

  6. Steve

    No problem. I’ve thought before of writing erotica from a woman’s perspective so if I do you can critique me! ๐Ÿ™‚

  7. Hey Erin,

    Alannah’s advice is spot on. And there are some amazing places on line to work with other aspiring erotica writers. You might try somewhere like the erotic writer’s forum on Absolute Write http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=43

    You’re brave to post samples on your blog and open yourself up, but getting critiques this way can be demoralizing :'(.

  8. Tom

    Hi Erin, I like your style. I suggest after you finish your Erotica to write romance novels. They are very lucrative especially if they have a little erotica in them. You’ll be crying all the way to the bank. There are some useful guides to help you in romance writing also. Keep it up.
    Tom

  9. Thank you both for your replies! I am actually active in a few different writing forums, but I’ll check out absolutewrite, Janis.

    Thanks Tom, I’ll look into it!

  10. Charlemagne

    Well, this is definitely very titillating. As a guy, I can’t say that I agree with Steve there. We’re not all monosyllabic grunters from some 80’s porno flick, some of us are actually romantics. If you intend to change anything about that piece, I wouldn’t change that particular perspective – I think it works just fine. I’m an author myself, but I’ve never written erotica. In my work though and in what I read, a melodic and poetic prose wins out over sheer description. Sure, description helps paint an image – but what if you could create a mood for the reader? Again, I’m not sure if that fits into erotica, but it certainly makes the reading process more memorable for someone like me.

    Back to the actual point, I believe that the objective of erotica is to excite the reader, n’est pas? If so, your work certainly does the trick. I wish you the best of luck with your novel.

  11. Jay

    I spotted you following me on twitter and thought I’d see who is out there. Thanks for the read. You are brave throwing it out there publicly, but if that is the way you work on your art then so be it, everyone has their own style. It probably isnt something I would sit down and read in that form but books that I have read from Harold Robbins like ‘The lonely Lady’ are a good example of the sort of thing more people could read. Though probably well ahead of his time when you consider 50 shades of grey is so popular, he knew how to set a scene and a mood in your mind as you read. Good luck with it.

  12. Thank you both for your somewhat conflicting feedback! ๐Ÿ˜‰

    I really do appreciate it. I’m just a naughty, sarcastic girl sometimes. Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts with me.

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